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melilley 02:07 PM 12-30-2013
Sounds great! I could picture in my head what was happening, very well written! It's amazing to me that 2 1/2 year olds can do this!

I know you said you were going to do some editing, but I found these two errors:

Once everyone had “their woolies” on, and a few more children were clear that I would be spending the day with them, the Miss Anne-Maria sand “Come Follow Me” again, and we set off. We walked through town about a mile to the forest. Periodically along the way, stragglers were encouraged with “Co

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The teachers also brought along hammers (each teacher carries a backpack with a first aid kit and a rotation of tools) for the children’s use, and periodically they asking for one to look for treasure in the rocks.

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